I really enjoyed reading this because I agreed with everything you said, and therefore could relate to it. One small thing that is only just occuring to me now though, is that it might be better if the author's note's meaning was put across in the main poem? Maybe not in this one as the meaning is already pretty clear, but definitely in the previous one, because the poem shouldn't have to rely on an author's note to explain it.

-From the Review Marathon (check out the link in my profile)

One point for going out into

the world and venturing out )

Hope for the best!

Love this poem. I couldnt agree more.

Great Job!

ClaireRide