This was an amazing poem. I have a poem similar, also called America, and when i read this tears were just about swelling up in my eyes, because sadly it is true. This happens everyday. And it will continue to be this way if we decide to do nothing, which we all know we will. Thank you for writing this poem.

ouch, this was painful to read yet moving at the same time...

oh and erm, you sent me a PM but i have no idea how to reply... do you have an email address or something?

i really feel this is true. i've been trying to write something like this, but can't seem to get the words out. this says it all! ;)

I like the tone of the message, but it's kind of looking at America negatively, and the rhythm of the poem and lines are a little awkward.

It feels like there's a story behind this. And if there's not...oh well

Pretty good, could try different punctuation and play with the lines a bit? Got the point through though and I have to agree

Sophia

I didn't really like the style. The lack of punctuation/ lines made it too difficult to read. I won't share my thoughts on the content.