|Reviews for Romantic Disaster|
| Vernelley 12/30/10 . chapter 1
The writing is ok, but I think there's too much information for a first chapter. The dialogue comes off as very script like; if that's not what you intended, I'd suggest fleshing out the paragraphs a bit more. There are also a few cases where the narrative switches between past and present. It could use a little polishing, but it seems all right so far.
| seredemia 12/30/10 . chapter 1
Nice start so far. I felt that there was a bit too much dialogue and too little description for my taste though, but I'm sure if you added just a few paragraphs on how their surroundings looked like, this would be perfect. However, whats good about the dialogue is that theyre really good with helping us know more about your characters. I felt that I got a really good grasp on their personalities so far, so kudos on that :D