I love Sean! He is my favourite character in this story (no offense Jake - you're not my type) ;)
I liked the beginning but I don't get why Jake ignored her in school.
Other than that it's a really nice story.

nice sad what he did to sara but that's okay..still happy ending :D good job

only thing i didnt like about this was that jake never explained why he did that 2 sara, but yeah, other than that thought it was sweet). i really like sean and his pms-ing lol.

That was awesome! I liked the way Sara had no interest in him initially and that it was well written. Only small mistake, you forgot the 'do' in "I'm sorry, I know you?" Great read overall! I'll add this to my community. :)

i think i'm in love with her brother... he is freaking awesome. maybe it's the fact that i'm also pmsing but yh...

I have a coffee addiction. I love pumpkin pie. I want an arrogant boy to change, but the boy I like isn't like that. He's popular though. Never noticed him until he said something nice to me. Oh and I thought you should know my name. It's Sarah. The similarities scare me a little.

Gimme the pie!

So, i read your story when you uploaded it, and i wanted to be the first to review, but i was almost passed out from tiredness (is that a word?) so i chose to sleep. And then there was school where the internet sucks and so here i am, reviewing your story...

I really think you have improved as a writer since i read the first chapter of Breakaway (very good, but still, there were mistakes) to this which is almost mistake free. I won't say anything about the mistakes cause i'm not exactly the best at grammar but the plot was good.

It was fluffy (a compliment), though trough and highly unlikely to ever happen in real life (good ;-) )

So I'll almost say that this plot has more potential than some of the many not so good stories with 45-100 chapters. Because in this story you ride the roller-coaster of life... (poetic right...?) It starts off a bit awkward and hesitant, becomes amazing and then goes downhill.. And up again :) SO a very good story.

And for you as a person... I'm sorry about the very very long review but i know i'd probably like it :) So you have to go back to studying and get good grades... They're really important you know?

Love,

Siara

So the only mistake I can remember at the moment is: "I don't believe you," I whispered." (In other words, there's an extra quotation mark.) Other than that, it's cute, fluffy, maybe not entirely realistic, and therefore basically amazing in every way. :)

AH that was SO cute!

loved it!