Okay, this is YOUR masterpiece, lady! This is WAY better than mine! And I suppose this is girl's love? I wonder if what this will turn out, an innocent or a not so innocent love? I just hope you'll update this soon since this is actually an original fiction I'm reading, not a fanfiction. I'm sure you'll do better in the next chapter. (If you continue it.) AND. The way you describe makes the reader feel like they're there in the scenes and how they interact.

Well, this is interesting.