| Reviews for Love Lessons |
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backtodecember 10/7/10 . chapter 2This is very well written, I like your descriptions and the solid foundation you're creating here. I feel for Elliot, she's wanting more out of life but it's like Becca's holding her back. |
Noir Schist 10/6/10 . chapter 3The story's getting definitely very interesting! I like the way how much insight you've shown into each important character's background. The descriptions are well-written, too. Also, I like how you detailed the 'teacher' side whereas most people would dive right into the romance (without giving a crap about any technicalities). I really enjoyed Lance's interactions with the other teachers and hope that you keep up that part. However, I feel that sometimes the descriptions are getting in the way of the story's progression. Even in the last chapter, while describing the staff room, the descriptions came in where Lance was being led in there by Guy. There was a break in the flow of the narration of the story. If you could avoid putting descriptions into places where an action is taking place, or shortening them in such cases, that would be nice. Other than that, I'm really liking this and am looking forward to updates! Hope my (extremely long and boring) commenting helps. |
backtodecember 10/6/10 . chapter 1Very nice, so far! I found myself wondering what Becca's note had said; what she'd do, but it is intriguing! |
backseat compromises 10/6/10 . chapter 1Wow, this sounds quite interesting so far! |
We Used To Wait 10/5/10 . chapter 3Oh, your writing is very, very, very English. You're one of those writers who's writing give is a dead giveaway of them living in the UK somewhere. . . But yeah, I like it so far. Not much I can comment on, seeing as I skimmed through it (too much studying awaits), but I'll be sure to leave an actual review next time. Have a great day. |
LittleMissMurdered 10/5/10 . chapter 1Really interesting so far! Definitely different. I have no idea where this is going so I'm curious to find out! |
TMi The Dork in the Corner 10/4/10 . chapter 2love it so far keep it up! |
We Used To Wait 10/4/10 . chapter 2It's cute, the way you described Ellie. She's dependent on Becca and wishes they had a better friendship. Or does she wish she had a better friendship with anyone in general? OH, and I love how you didn't have the teacher SUPER cute to the point where you wrote about girls fawning over him. Some fics do that, and I guess that fine, except for the fact that it makes the story seem even more unreal and more common-like. |
Noir Schist 10/1/10 . chapter 1Oh, it sure is worth posting! And worth reviewing, as well You're right, it's not the most original of ideas, but the way it's presented is very interesting. I like your writing style, too- clear and simple. The characters have also been presented very smoothly. I've definitely got my eye on this story, and am waiting for the next chapter. (: p.s. My stats page is kinda screwed, too. Does re-uploading it work? |