Simply breathtaking. I honestly love the feelings of loss and hope being conveyed in the poem. Keep writing!

I kinda got a little confused in the middle there. The beginning was interesting. It set up an interesting concept for a piece. But then I got confused about what the gift is if not your virginity... is it your heart? And I'm not sure what exactly the divide is... Maybe it's just me being silly here. Anyway I liked the word "paradisiacal" that was a really powerful and beautiful piece. The word heartgold is a great combination as well. Nicely done.

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Virtuously done :)

Beautiful! I have discovered a love for choka, thanks to you. Is this based on real experiences, by any chance? :O

This is an very deep peice. I am glad you shared this with everyone .

Nicely done. ''But I permanently praise the divide'' that was excellent. As was the last line. Keep it Up!

"I permenantly praise The divide until Valid love evaporates This tainted water..." I really like this line as I think it compliments what the poem is about. A great poem.

Beautiful! I wish I could write stuff like this! :D

I like the way you neatly fitted deep emotions into the limits of the choka form. "...I permanently praise / The divide..." poetically makes it clear that there are no regrets for an important decision made and acted upon. Good job.