I am thoroughly in love with your style, flowing, concise, giving the reader the chance to exercise one's own imagination instead of cramping it with the writer's imagination exclusively. Brava!

Nice and cute

cute, very short, but cute

i liked the set up of it

one thing tho: in making it shorted the tone is rushed and a lot of details are over-looked... like for example Helen was riding in a limo, then talking to Alice who had been apperently hit (the reader had to assume that)

and some sort of transition should come before Alice and Paris randomly walking in the park

when writing, just keep details and transitions... and pacing in mind

A cute and enjoyable variation of the ancient story. I think even Homer would be amused.

This is great story. I like the idea of how it is modernized! Good job!