the end that's sweet, sometimes love starts like that, just trust and I like how you put the death of that man without doing any move or noise and just fade.

I hope you will pick this back up some time in the near future. I would like to read more of it. Nicely done. :)

More, please!

This looks really cool. I can't wait to read more and see how the story develops. Just please don't make any cliches, I've seen too many amazing stories go down hill because of it and I want your story to survive! Only thing I can tell you is to make future chapters longer and to add more detail. Then again this is the prologue and they're meant to be very vague and mysterious. Make the next chapter soon please! Thanks for reviewing my poem by the way! It made me so happy! :3

very good! thank you for reviewing my short one shot! i like this...very cool. I am also writing a fantasy story called The Drifting, if you could read and review my first chapter thatd be great!

again keep it up and I will definatelty be reading more from you!

Good start to this story as well, but like with the other one, try to add more detail and make the chapters longer. :)

Can't wait to read more (: x