|Reviews for Penumbrae|
| findingss 12/26/12 . chapter 52
Wow...just wow. I'm like mind blown over here. Little Vincent it so cute! Awww! - I knew it! I knew Jenna was pregnant and that Eidan did that to her. Hopefully in the future, Jenna will forgive him.
| illusionae 12/26/12 . chapter 52
Vincent is such a cute child! He kind of reminds me of what Jenna used to be like, but that must be because Jenna was really childish back then... That scene where Eidan was talking to Vincent was just too cute for me. I'm not even sure why because it was a short scene but I just really enjoyed reading Eidan's reactions to his son. He seems like he would make a wonderful father which is a shame because Jenna doesn't want him to be a part of Vincent's life... Speaking of which, I think Jenna's just too scared right now. She must be pushing away Eidan just so she wouldn't get hurt again, or at least I hope so. I refuse to believe that she actually wants to forget about her relationship with Eidan because they were such a cute couple! It would make me so very happy if Eidan, Jenna and Vincent could be one big happy family by the end of this story. Please update soon! Waiting for new chapters in this story is very painful for me! :(
| CieloRayn 12/26/12 . chapter 52
Lol great chapter ). I loved the interaction between vince and eidan. I think the italics are Lucan lol P
| DutchAver 12/26/12 . chapter 51
DAWUT. Okay. With Vincent's identity, you've seriously surprised me again, with her being Jenna's and Eidan's son and all. I should've seen it coming, but it was a surprise nonetheless. It's kind of hard to imagine Jenna being a mother, to be very honest with you xD She doesn't sound like a mother to me anyway, but maybe I'm still too stuck with the Jenna from the prologue. To say it in the beautiful words of Madame Vastra from Who: 'when did this baby... begin?' Presumably one of the nights they spent together before Eidan left. And now, I'm beginning to understand Jenna even better - she hates Eidan because it looks like he got her pregnant and then ran away ASAP. Poor Eidan, and poor Jenna too.
Where did Lucan learn such excellent magic, by the way? As far as I know, he hasn't practiced magic before, so it's a bit odd that he's so strong now. With the scythe and all.
I loved the start of your chapter. Really sad and it really got to me that the characters were recovering from the big blast Celeste's death gave them. Part of me wonders if she's really dead and can be brought back by ending the curse. Another part of me knows that that first part is just afraid to face the bitter truth. Still, I'm holding my hopes up.
I loved the fighting scene! I think Lucan lets Jenna go a bit too easily, but that's all the criticism I had. I was on the edge of my seat during it.
I'll read the next chapter tomorrow! I discovered one mistake:
'Mana blinked, and Jenna didn't wait for her to ask anymore questions.' These are supposed to be two words, any and more
Until next time!
| thenutrunningthenuthouse 12/26/12 . chapter 52
...Whoa. Well then, that uh, explained Vincent's conception. I swear, reading this chapter, and I still plain cannot imagine Eidan doing something like that. Crazy thing that darkness is.
Well, I don't know if Eidan, Jenna, and Vincent can be one a happy family. I mean, I'd like to see that (I see Eidan being an adorable father), but I think it'll definitely take some road blocks. I'm not normally the hugest fan of baby twists in stories, but I think this one is going to work really well. Also, please, let Jenna and Eidan somehow get back together. They were sooo cute and since Celeste/Caelum can't really happen anymore...
I swear, seeing Caelum now is so strange. Like, I feel like he's some wild lion who's behaved for long enough for the owners to take him off the leash, but i still suspect he's capable of some pretty crazy violence (perhaps to aid ending the curse? Perhaps not? I don't know).
But hah, I have to say, it does sound kind of mean to have Jenna tell Eidan to kill his sister. And haha, Lucan. Funny how seeing him dead doesn't sound so crazy anymore. C'mon Jenna, start some killin'! Now for Grace. Odd, if we had been told early in the story that Grace would die, I wouldn't have minded. Now - it's gonna be a tear-jerker if/when she does die.
Gahh, I have no idea how you're going to end this story. I just see it having a tragic ending and then having a really sweet ending. I hope it's a mix of both.
Anyway, update soon! I'm off to be nostalgic about the violence-prone young father character I had in one of the books I wrote this year...
| Deserthawk 12/20/12 . chapter 6
OH MY GOD THIS REMINDS ME OF - a certain book. Not that I've ever read it, haha.
Nice scene at the end there. Your descriptions of Grace are cool. Especially her eyes.
Am I a terrible person for enjoying that? Like Jenna is kind of, mm still kind of a brat. She needs to toughen up seriously, or I'm just going to be rooting for Grace all the way here. How you gonna win Eidan if you're bawling all the time, girl? Unless that's the sort of thing he likes. Which makes me not like him.
I wonder if Grace has some sort of sense where Eidan is... otherwise that would make everything a lot more stalkerish/creepy.
I wonder what Eidan actually looks like. Since if Grace can change her hair he probably can too...
That was a cute Eidan/Jenna moment, with the hair. Props to you.
| CieloRayn 12/18/12 . chapter 51
Lol I did ). I knew it all along P. Great chapter like always lots of suspense.
| junebird28 12/14/12 . chapter 51
I'm addicted. So completely, totally, unfathomably addicted.
First things first, your writing is absolutely phenomenal. It's just so engaging. most authors on this site can't get away with writing paragraphs of prose just following the thoughts of the characters, but I find myself hanging on every single word.
next, the story line is so intricate and detailed, I have no idea how you thought of it so well and manage to keep everything coherent. I've been so into the story line that I've been blowing off studying for finals to read this.
third, characters. How you managed to make them each so convincing is beyond me. I find myself trying to predict how each one would react and it's amazing because I feel like I know them personally. My favorite is Zeph. He makes my heart happy. Maybe I just like a bad boy :P.
Eidan and Jenna's relationship is awesome. It is just so complicated, but it's not unrealistically complicated, if that makes any sense. Like the actual fundamentals of their relationship is believable. And I definitely saw the whole Vincent thing coming. I guessed that was what Eidan did to her and I guess I was right!
What else? Hmmmm, I could honestly go on and on about how great this is, I really could. But I have to wajee up for work in 5 hours, so I'm gonna leave it at that.
Fantastic, amazing story! Update soon please :D
| illusionae 12/10/12 . chapter 51
I suspected that Vincent might be Jenna and Eidan's son... because of what Eidan did to Jenna when he was controlled by the darkness. Whilst it's really sad to see Jenna hating Eidan even though it wasn't his entire fault, I can sort of understand why she's doing it. I think she's just confused and anyone in her position would obviously have a grudge against Eidan. From her perspective, he raped her and then left her to look after a baby for three years WHILST BEING CURSED AT THE SAME TIME. Even though Eidan tried to help her, I can still understand why she's having difficulty listening to him. She's only human after all. Humans can be selfish and self pitying and Jenna is certainly an example of that.
However that doesn't mean that I want her to continue pushing him away... I hope that they sort things out soon! I miss all the cute romantic scenes between Jenna and Eidan! :(
As for Lucan, I only have one thing to say and that is I love the idea of him having a huge scythe and attacking Eidan. Since they're clones, the idea of a fight between them really got me excited. Great job on this chapter! PLEASE UPDATE SOON.
| V 12/10/12 . chapter 51
Anon'ing 'cause too tired to sign in.
Er... First time and... what were the chances o_o Can't say I really had a positive reaction since I do not like small children... or people in general, but anyway. (Also maybe because I have an aversion to teen pregnancy in stories. Like there isn't enough of that irl, which isn't even fantasy...)
By a few chapters back it was already apparent what Eidan did, but no, a small child was not really what I was expecting because I actually thought Vincent was older. Though I wonder if Vincent has ever asked about his father. I don't know if kids that age wonder about that yet. And Eidan might be just a tad surprised that he has a son...
Okay Jenna was never one of my favourite characters but I vastly prefer younger pre-haircut Jenna. Just not a huge fan of her character in the present time. Hiya Eidan thanks for rescuing me now please gtfo. Uh, real welcoming? o_O Yes, Eidan did leave back then but he did it for her and Jenna went from desperately wanting to know why to not wanting to listen to it now, which is pretty sad. Yes he left; but he came back, didn't he?
Really not warming to Jenna. At -that- time, Eidan couldn't control the darkness so what he did wasn't directly his fault; the only problem I see with him is that he didn't explain where he was running off to. But Jenna kind of went from a sad phase to an all-out hate phase. "I don't know what you want, but I want you to leave" is kind of selfish no matter how you look at it. Sure, Jenna's probably pretty scarred, but if she's not going to forgive Eidan it would still be the right thing to hear him out, which she is pretty reluctant to do right now.
["MOMMY!" / There was no way that could have been Zeph.]
-LOL but it would've been hilarious if it was XD
The part I liked most this chapter was Lucan's fight scene... Not just because of Lucan and the fact that I like violence... but it was also the least depressing/angsty part of the whole chapter. I don't really have much to comment on there though, but I do wonder about this 'saviour' the italics keep alluding to. And I still think he's possessed as opposed to psycho.
Cbs nitpicking 'cause I'm tired (two 1-hour-one-way train trips in one day) so I'll leave the nitpicking to someone else.
But yeah. Good chapter anyways.
| gabriela 12/9/12 . chapter 51
I KNEW WHO VINCENT WAS AND I STILL WASN'T READY FOR THIS!
I'm glad you updated, though! And I'm glad Eiden's back. I also have an idea about how Vincent came to be... (I mean I KNOW how he came to be but... you know.) Honestly, this is /one of/ my favorite chapters thus far. Can't wait til your next update :)
| Sky65 12/9/12 . chapter 51
…looks up…looks back down…looks up…slwly looks down… loos up... WTH! AHHHHH JENNA AND EIDAN HAD A CHILD?!WHAAAAAAAT? Ive been seriosuly wondering who the Vincent person was...
he was constantly mentioned...OK it official, I need more. Eidan is finally back, Celeste is dead, and Jenna had a baby- now i just need Lucan dead and the curse broken, am i righ? lols cant wait! Update when you can please!
| Charil Zweig 12/9/12 . chapter 51
OH GOD I KNEW IT!
That's what was wrong with Jenna at the end of chapter 48, isn't it! She wasn't just sick. It was morning sickness. And Vincent has... just seen his father, hasn't he :) That's what Eidan did when he was consumed by the darkness, what Mana and Zeph didn't want to tell him about, why Jenna seems to have suffered some sort of PTSD because of him- aah! You tease me like this, letting one nugget of information slip and then leaving it on a cliffhanger!
Anyway. As cruel as this sounds, I really love what Lucan has become. It's so tragic haha. I loved the juxtaposition between him and Eidan in the fight scene, even just from the language that you use you get a sense of how much Eidan has come into his own and how Lucan seems to just keep spiralling further and further. I never would've pegged Lucan as anything other than a romantic rival from the start, but he's up there with Ethel now as one of the creepiest characters in the story. I like it :)
And now to sit on my hands until the next one is finished
| teen-emotions 12/9/12 . chapter 51
So what wait?! Vincent is Eidan and Jenna's son? Oh my lord!
| thenutrunningthenuthouse 12/9/12 . chapter 51
[Perhaps it was time she stopped secluding herself indoors.
Jenna wished she stayed in the airship.]
hah, I love this transition. I try these occasionally in my writing, and they're so snappy. Love it. Oh, and love Zeph braiding Mana's hair. Poor friendzoned fool.
F***** Lucan, of course! Let's be a d-bag and ambush Jenna. Jerk. *in Obi Wan Kenobi's voice* I LOVED YOU!
Wha...what-what...WHEN DID JENNA HAVE A KID?
I barely remember him mentioned in the fight and it occurred to me that he looked like Eidan, but what? When did he and Jenna have sex? Is it not his kid? Is it even her kid? Gahh, what's going on? Who's kid is this? (I'm still guessing Jenna and Eidan's...)
Jeez Louise, you have some twists here! Lucan is still completely insane, Eidan and Lucan are fighting equals, and Jenna and Eidan had a kid. Hah, you should've seen how confused I was when I heard Vincent's name. I was seriously thinking who the hell is that?
Whew, crazy chapter. This story is great, and the twists just keep mounting and mounting. Can't wait to see where you lead us next and trust me, I'm a willing passenger through the ride (and congratulations on managing to continue such a long work). :)