|Reviews for Hyper Fighting Machine Marmalade!|
| TheBloodEdge 5/15/12 . chapter 1
... I was going to write something like this. How are you beating me to the punch Brendan?
Okay, let me start this review with... You were drunk, high and mental when you wrote this weren't you? This story is so full of crack I might get high just reading it.
And. I. LOVE. IT.
Everything I love about magical girls and everything I love about mecha in one story! Dear God! This is so awesome! TOO AWESOME!
Marmalade should start with a G. All the great mecha shows start or at least have a G in it. So if I were you, I'd call it... GARmalade! But seriously, why Marmalade?
Moeko's name literally translates to Cute Girl.
This is on my favourites. You are going to write it till the end. NO. EXCEPTIONS.
| Master Gray Wolf 11/17/10 . chapter 2
Sheesh, what a klutz.
| Master Gray Wolf 11/17/10 . chapter 1
Antilovers? Lol! Vs Moe!
Not a big fan of moe, but this is a cute and funny parody.
I was going to ask if this was a kind of satire (?) to, what do they call it, "Wapanese" characters that you probably see a lot before doing this story, considering the main character and the explanation of the school.
| Godlybunny 11/4/10 . chapter 2
Off to a good start. This chapter is interesting and it grabs my attention, especially with the dry humor and over exaggeration of the qualities of the characters. And yes, I will stay tuned.
| Slaaty 11/1/10 . chapter 1
This is hilarious! I'm very anxious to know how her first battle goes.
You really exaggerated the "frail anime girl who's a loner etc." but as this IS a parody, I find it fitting (and very, very amusing).
My only suggestion is in this sentence:
"Little did she know that she would soon be thrust into a world of action and adventures of epic scale, a world of high-tech mecha battles, dramatic high-school romance, more action to keep up interest, exposition explaining the backstory behind all this, and last but not least, comedy to prevent the situation from becoming too depressing."
Shorten it, fix it up, I don't know - but it sounds rather awkward.
I cannot wait for more! Good luck with NaNoWriMo :)
| Godlybunny 11/1/10 . chapter 1
Fellow NaNoWriMo writer! Lol needed to say that. the story is really funny with you piking fun at manga and anime. It adds a sense of humor and makes the story interesting. Not to say that the story is boring. It's got a good plot going and I like it!
Hopefully I'll get mine posted soon. If you could review that, that would be great! Keep writing!