|Reviews for Moonlight|
| AH36 5/20/13 . chapter 33
I can never stop saying this: I love Charias
| sue8857 5/15/13 . chapter 33
I'm so glad you're continuing to write Moonlight.
I can't wait for its completion, because together with Broken Wings it will make a great pair of stories.
| Whansbee 5/13/13 . chapter 33
I like this chapter, even though a) it's short, and b) Izeri still hasn't told the truth, the whole truth. I do think that his character will mature enough to let Charias in all the way though, there is hope...
Re: your writing, listen to Izeri, his journey is this story basically. I don't mean to be facetious at all, but you always want to hear from your protagonist.
| till2sday 5/13/13 . chapter 33
Better, much better, you are finding Izeri again. As far as your comments above, whats beautiful about writing fiction is that you can changed it - just erase it, push the back button, shade text and delete - now weave a new tapestry of circumstances ...if only reality could imitate.
| Guest 5/13/13 . chapter 33
Calm down. All can be fixed in the end. I agree the sex scene should come out in which Izeri is full of shark bites. It doesn't make sense. Moreover, fey and sidhe are manipulative by earliest construction. You can't help it now that the sidhe and fey are at heart a bunch of racist, class obsessed fascists. They are. You made the point early on in Broken Wings. Moreover the mages are not so nice either, in general.
Overall I would say that Izeri must rise above his upbringing but there is no reason to push it. People don't push easily so it isn't real to write as if they do. However their can be much anguish and self searching as Izeri comes to terms with his fey nature and his involvement (love?) with Charias. People can rise above their natures and their fears if they are motivated to do so. Develop the motivation for doing so.
Why does Izeri want Charias? Why not make it more shallow to begin with? He wants to keep Charias close because of the secret. he has discovered he sort of likes tall men talking with Jak. He is flattered that Charias is attracted to fey, and he is lonely enough at Allyrawood to think he might like to try a boyfriend. He has plenty of examples around him to suggest that might not be so bad. Remember this character is a bit prim. Hot sex is not natural to him. Getting to a hot sex scene is going to take character development.
Think of a Jane Austen novel to start. Charias doesn't have 10,000 pounds a year but he does have a ship filled with treasure. He is handsome, rich, a challenge (boorish nature), surprisingly sexually attractive when Izeri thinks about it, and too close to an important secret. This last provides the motivation to get Izeri started despite a diffident nature.
Don't try to keep a schedule that forces bad writing. Accept you are having trouble with this part and slow down. Go write something else for awhile as necessary.
| Raaawr Ima Dinosaur 5/12/13 . chapter 33
Oh for the love of all things holy, Izeri! Just tell him. I'm gettin' real tired of your shite, fae.
I honestly feel for Charias right now. He doesn't deserve the treatment and secrets and lies he's receiving from Izeri, whether it's in Izeri's nature or not.
| Gabriella 5/4/13 . chapter 32
Awesome . I loved it, can't wait to see more! .
| spellblade 4/25/13 . chapter 32
I love you. That's all I need to say :3
Everytime you update I am super happy!
| borderlinecrazy 4/23/13 . chapter 32
Poor Izari. He's going to get so badly hurt... it's like a trainwreck - but he just keeps barrelling down the tracks, faster and faster as the disaster gets closer and closer...
| nekoii 4/23/13 . chapter 32
Hi nekoii-desu here from LJ
Since I definately said more than enough in that .
I'll just leave a review hit :)
All the best
| Issa 4/22/13 . chapter 32
Seriously, this chapter is awesome. The sexy scenes were great, but what made it so much better for me was the intimacy of the whole thing. And I am so glad that Izeri isn't a shrinking violet anymore when they're in bed. Also loved: Charias showing his vulnerability and how they're taking it slow- there's just something incredibly sweet with their tentative touches and explorations with each other.
| Whansbee 4/22/13 . chapter 32
I feel like cheering Izeri on, 'go ahead, you can do it' lol. Seriously, it's nice to see him be honest with his feelings. It's also obvious to me that he has very real feelings for Charias, just unable to come to terms with them atm.
Charias, is amazing, simply amazing, even when I take into account his stalkerish, obsessive tendencies. He really seems to love Izeri, I hope this remains constant.
Looking forward to seeing Izeri redeem himself now. Lovely chappie. And, oh, awkward smex done right ;))
| AH36 4/22/13 . chapter 32
Yay for new chapter and some lovely touchings!
I really love how you manage to keep Izeri so different from a human, but still someone that could be related to. I also love just how different the sexual/emotional relationship is between these two and Jak's relationship(s).
And, I will say this every opportunity I get: I love Charias. To absolute bits.
Keep up all the awesome!
| rurou 4/22/13 . chapter 32
"Even if I knew that I would lose you tomorrow, I would hold you today and love you for every moment that we had together." FAVORITE LINE. EVER.
and i think izeri is already in love with charias-has been since before he fell into the ocean- but it's just taking him some time to come to terms with it and learn how to reciprocate charias' affections in a "human" way. which i think is better than if he just jumped into charias' arms and ran off into the sunset, cuz it's more realistic, but it's still slightly frustrating. at least he's not so oblivious anymore. looking forward to your next update of this fic xx
| BloodyJam 4/22/13 . chapter 32
Awwww that was so cute! I love these characters, they're really awesome!