|Reviews for To Dear God|
| Amazin' Grace 11/5/10 . chapter 1
Nice, but has the potential to stand out. It is weaker in the beginning because of the many "I"s, "you"s and the weak verbs. Provide a stronger image by using vivid diction while varying the syntax of the stanzas. The thoughts are there, the ingredients are good - just mix it up! Blend it and organize it well to make your meaning stronger!
I am glad for your experience. May the Lord shine more in your heart each day.
(Assuming you are writing from personal experience, that you are really the narrator :)
| kloun mannequin 11/5/10 . chapter 1
I lav the last line about letting things on his hands.