Honestly, I don't understand most of your work.

I think a few poems just don't have a point.

This however, was good. The first few lines were perfect.

I also prefer your non rhyming poems to the rhyming ones.

The sky/moon/cloud/stars is usually mentioned in every piece, directly or indirectly. You could try openning your mind to the other areas of descriptions.

You should also try writing song lyrics or a short story! You've mentioned that you like rock, so work on that and go on from there!

Anyway, good luck ]

I loved the first four lines. Absolutely brilliant.

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"squiggly roads and swirling

Turquoise oceans-

On the maps, in the atlas-"

love the way that you described

the atlas. maps themselves are so

beautifully made, and your words

definitely did them justice.

Beautiful, even though I didn't quite understand it!