I liked the action of this chapter, and the end has readers on the edge of their seats. Well done on this so far :)

Wow. Now I REALLY didn't see that coming.

Wow. I didn't see that coming. I guess Jamie just can't drop her love for dogs.

This family cares an awful lot about dog shows. I almost expected her father to hit June.

Oh no. I don't like what I'm seeing in Jamie. Is June the name of her younger sister?

An interesting start. I guess being a teenager in any year isn't easy.

Very good. This chapter reads much better now.

This is a good re-written chapter except for a couple of mistakes you made in the paragraph that begins "It sees as they start running..."

Also, you did well with the revised Chapter 3 of "Blood Tears."

Very good. Even though I read your original version of this, it still holds my interest.

I don't think anyone will mind your using the song "Turn, Turn, Turn" here. It is a good reminder of the atmosphere of the 1960s. The rest of the chapter is very well done with good descriptive scenes,

Well done. You move the story along at a good pace and the cliffhanger ending leaves the reader wanting to know what will happen next.

Very good, but I think you made a mistake by typing "Jamie was brushing Queen" when you meant June was doing it and Jamie was watching them.

I'm glad you could use the idea I gave you. This is a well-written chapter, but in the last paragraph you spelled "leash" as "lease."

I think you are doing better at showing us what kind of people Jamie and her family are, and how they cope with problems. Maybe you should put Queen in more scenes, since she is the focus point of the story.

I think the changes you made in the story have improved it. The characters seem more interesting and Jamie's emotional reactions help to prepare the reader for the conclusion.