It's great but remember to add the new name instead of agua but if you want for the info and I'll go on and hanger it myself...

Just wanted to let you know that you don't need to warn people about aliens in the story. It's cool, and there are a lot weirder things on this site, so don't worry about it.

As for your story, it felt a little weird that they were taking the time to bury the mother before they got away from the people that were chasing them, but I like the visual description of Mrs. Ronda. It's very informative without going on and on and on about everything and everyone in the room, like some authors do.

Nice work.

loveloveLOVED this! I can't wait for the epilogue.

Wow, I can't believe how many chapters you've added! Granted, I did look at this about six months ago, but still! So many chapters added! I'll try and read as many as I can today!

(PS: if you don't know who this is...than you don't know. But if you do, I do have an account on here, and I will immediately add this to my Favs!)

Luv it! Once again, GREAT story. It deserves way more reviews than it's getting.

Just one thing:

If someone's dialouge takes up a few paragraphs, you have to put more quotation marks at the start of each paragraph. Like this:

"Hey," she said. "I know you don't know how to save us, but please try.

"You're our only hope."

"Sapphire and Annabel agreed that we should all have a companion that represented our gift. Annabel's is a water otter. It is made completely out of water. You could only make out the head and the front paws but the rest of the body looked like a wave of water.

Sapphire's is a wind wolf. You can only see the outline of it and the eye which glows a bright yellow. It makes no sound unless it howls, which makes your skin crawl. It kind of freaks me out to be honest.

Nira's is a phoenix. The phoenix is a bird of fire. When it dies it is reborn immediately.

Hunter's companion is different. It is a monkey. But not just any monkey, it is a gold monkey. The same color as Hunter's gift. The monkey is small enough to sit on Hunter's shoulder."

this part reminds me of the animals in the movie "The Golden Compass" Especially the golden monkey.

Overall this story is very interesting and fun! Keep up the good work! ;D

Great chapter! I love their new appearances.

Can't wait to read more!

Your welcome! Don't worry, you're doing amazing! I have the same problems with the stories I post on this site, too. Hardly anyone reviews them. I'm going to email my BFF (emijstar) about this story RIGHT NOW. So expect a review from her soon!

Great chapter! :)

And I'll make sure to spread the word!

I'm Sapphire. No srsly I am

Gee . . . I don't know. I guess Tigria, because I love animals. The ones that don't kill you, that is.

i'm annabel. hehehehehehehee

Oh, shoot! Sorry, I don't think I got those DocX deliveries until now. There must be something wrong with my email notification system. However, this story is coming along nicely without my help. Do you still want me to help you?

You do seem to have improved a lot, so you don't need my help as much anymore. If you want it, though, I'll give it.

Great story! :D :D :D :D :D :D

Well, it looks like you're doing okay without my help. The paragraphs seem to be fine. One thing I think you should work on, though, is the proper use of commas and semicolons.

Here's a helpful link (take out all the spaces, then copy and paste):

www . grammarbook punctuation / commas . asp

There are some things that you already know in there, but I think it will still be helpful.

Another thing I would like to add that isn't included is this:

Use a comma when you are separating an action from something that someone said. I know I probably made that sound pretty confusing, but here's an example:

"Hey," he said, waving at her. (There's a comma between said and waving.)

And here's an answer to your review of my story, Code Red: Band Geek Style: a code red, at my school, is when a dangerous person enters the school grounds.

By the way, please remember to capitalize the word "I".

Other than that, this story is going great! I can't wait to read more.

- Mingo-la :D :D :D

THIS IS A GREAT STORY! I LOVE IT! KEEP GOING! WOOHOO!