This was a pretty good opening, very very very short, however. Maybe describe some more? Besides the shortness of it, you got right to the point which was awesome :) Hope to have time to read more soon!

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I really liked the explanation of Iemon's situation while they were on the plane; it was an effective use of setting. It's also interesting how he's spent so much time trying to get his parents' attention but has failed. Also, I think there will definitely be some buildup now that Abhash and Sara have been introduced. I wonder if Sara is the one mentioned in the prologue? Well, I'll have to read on and find out, won't I? Great first few chapters so far.

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Though the prologue was pretty short, the situation was presented pretty well. I just felt that maybe including a bit more detail, particularly about how the narrator feels about the situation, would make it better. But it was a great hook of a prologue.

Woah, Indians! I'm actually part-Indian, my parents are from Delhi and we've visited Bangalore a couple of times.

Nice chapter; seems quite filler-type, I'm not sure where this is going yet. But I'd like to see what else you've got in store! (:

x mandy

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Interesting start; I like the quote in the beginning. Look forward to reading more (:

x mandy

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