|Reviews for My heart|
| HiddenFromYou 11/28/10 . chapter 1
The like the beginning of this poem, as it starts off as really unique. But I don't really like the end as it falls back into the same thread as a lot of what you've written.
I do find though, that the short lines work better with these poems than the ones I reviewed yesterday, as the tension in these ones needs to be built up quickly, and the short lines do that.
"cant" - Should have an apostrophe.
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