|Reviews for the ocean|
| inversed ballerina 1/19/11 . chapter 1
Loved the imagery here. Beautiful job.
| kloun mannequin 12/2/10 . chapter 1
that's true, sometimes people just shallow and they need to return back to simple.
| FelleLLoyd 11/28/10 . chapter 1
This is an excellent poem. I can honestly say I enjoyed every part of this. Keep writing.
| C. Tattiana H-H 11/28/10 . chapter 1
Ah, yes. I love how you kickoff this piece with a little alliteration. I think that was a great way to begin because it grabbed my attention and the phrasing of “gutter glamour” was definitely interesting and almost contradictory. I also like the clever use of brackets in the third last line. It gave the lines around it multiple meanings that I think was a really neat way to end the piece.
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| Loqwell 11/28/10 . chapter 1
Wow, your poem just rolled off the tongue; it was quite lovely. I also enjoyed the imagery you used. Nice!
| culture clash 11/28/10 . chapter 1
love the wordplay on g(r)asping. i also love the phrase "gutter glamour" - it makes me think of someone grungy but strangely beautiful. very clever. :D culture clash.
| Angel Investor 11/28/10 . chapter 1
Very good. Great imagery and metaphors. The only thing that bothered me was the fact that you didn't capitalize the title or the first letter of the first line in the poem. Other than that it was amazing. :)
| HiddenFromYou 11/28/10 . chapter 1
I didn't like that you had very few pauses throughout your sentences, because at it is, it looks like they're meant to be really fast and when I do that, there's too much to take in with the time I have.
Leading on from that, I didn't like the complicated imagery that you wrote here either, seeing as that added to the amount I had to take in. Regardless of that though, there were times when simple language would have sufficed and down just as much as the complicated stuff. Sometimes, less in more and simplier is better.
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