|Reviews for Searching: A War Poem|
| Kalista Jia 3/19/11 . chapter 1
Wow I find this poem really amazing. My heart was going bom bom bom as I read it. I like the pace very much.
My favorite lines are:
The alive trying to be as quiet as the dead.
Then, a crack of light, a voice
The search ends
I find these lines really intense and ... emotional? I can't seem to find the word for it. Ah how I love this type of tension in story/poem. Nice job!
| kloun mannequin 12/2/10 . chapter 1
the ending is sad, but true, someti es no matter how the hope is alive, just there's no one in the ending.
| Loqwell 11/30/10 . chapter 1
I'll review for you, if you review for me. ;p Just kidding, as much as I love it when people read/give feedback on my work, I'm not going to demand it. After all, I'm already here reviewing yours anyways. It was just my first reaction to a statement asking for something.
You wanted feedback on the ending, no? I think it's a little ambiguous; the reader doesn't know how the search ends, just that it did. Personally, I like that about it. I also liked how you used searching to tie the poem together; in a poem that is describing many different oddly angled snapshots, I think it needed that to give it a bit of cohesiveness.
Hope you get the feedback from 5 (now 4 :]) people you need. If you can't get it here you can always asks people around you, especially other teachers, as how can they say no to a student in need? xD