This is touching :) reminds me of young love.

Some of the stanza breaks are somewhat erratic however.

All around, beautiful .

Marionettes

"baby, what's the sun supposed to do?" i love that line. ) also, "i think of how much prettier i'd be - if you were standing next to me." you have a way with words, one of the best authors i've seen, definitely.

I like the repetition bout the sun and the bones part.

cool piece.