That's a pretty cool poem. I like how simply it ends. "Echoes off mountains controls me now" made the least sense to me.

your title's not the only things that chiche...the poems "wonderful words" are nothing special. maybe if they hadent been used in the thousands of other poems on this site...

very good. very very good.

The words you used were very good, i realy got what you were trying to say, but it wouldn't hurt to change the title of it to something more unique, i even hace a story under the same name, no comparison, i liked it.

This is really good, dark and depressing, but still great poetry.

Very powerful words. I understand the sleep thing- it is a nothingness that mostly feels better than the 'chaos' of reality. Unfortunately, I only managed 3 hrs last night. The specific words seem to be chosen carefully; they are beautiful in themselves and contribute to the style of your piece. Great writing. Solii