|Reviews for Of Men and Trolls|
| Nera Lasalus 12/10/10 . chapter 1
I'm curious as to why the cat sought her out. If it's a wild creature, I wouldn't think it would be so friendly towards a human. I'd assume the troll would be a problem for the cat as well (encroaching on its territory, competition for food, etc.), but I'm a little unsure as to why the animal would want the girl's help in particular.
| The lone canine 12/9/10 . chapter 1
like this. Just plain like this story. I like the style of this fantasy story, and I can understand the smooth transition from paragraph to paragraph is easy to follow and doesn't leave me confused or anything. I like how you described. I especially liked how the cat was not afraid of her and instead was rather interested and curious, a great animal trait that is very enjoyable.
Hm...It's not a critique actually but something I notice in other short stories I've read. People start a new paragraph whenever a new speaker is present, although not everyone likes to do it that way. I don't like it but I do it anyways...
Ahh...I say this is great. Really fantastic job and good luck with the contest this is for.
Sincerely, The lone canine. :)
| inspirationgirl55 12/9/10 . chapter 1
Jill-Pickle here :P
That was a very well written story. It makes you yearn for the rest of the story. I liked how the cat wasn't afraid of her and was instead curious. Its a very beautiful animal and master connection.
Um lets see critiques...
I'm telling you i wish i could offer you some sort of tip but it seems very well written.
Maybe when you switch from the choosing to a couple moons later make it a little more evident that they are now married. Like maybe, A couple moons later, once they were married and blah blah etc. Just a tip and i really think it would be fine how you have it now to.
But rather you choose to use the advice or not, it is magnificent and adventurous. You're very good at fantasy
Jill-Pickle (i don't have a cool smiley to use on here ): )