I love the story this tells. Amazing, as always.

I really liked the first stanza. I thought that description was really great and I liked the word chcoies of hypnotizing and captive and phantom.

The second stanza was great too. I love how you tied it back to the exit music with the end of the credits and again your word choices like tethered and betstowing were really great.

In the third stanza I feel like I missed something. I wasn't sure what the notion was that you feel in love with and I also didn't get why a sould would break during birth.

That last couplet while I loved it by itself as such a simple and blantantly true statement, somehow I didn't get it's connection the rest of the piece.

-Review Marathon this weekend (link in my profile)-

This is well thought out and carefully/wisely written. Ideas are dangerous things to fall in love with. ;)

enjoyed the last stanza

i keep going over the phantom line again and again.