I cried thats all I have to say.

I cried. I cried. I cried.

OMG. This was one of the best stories I've ever read! I ended up crying. You're an extremely talented writer and I think you should keep writing. Can't wait to read your other stories. :) Keep it up!

:'( It was brilliant though! x

Wow. Is all I can say. When I clicked on your story I never imagined it would be so touching. The first chapter was a bit nerve wracking but I felt so compelled to find out what this guy was going to do next.

It's so interesting how you showed his life in stages, the first where he was a mindless soul, trying to make a living with prostitution, then with his heart getting the better of him.

Also, the fact that you never once mention his name leaves that sense of mystery to the character, it doesn't categorize him.

The ending was beautiful, I could just imagine how that would play out in slow motion, overall, it was a brilliantly written story that was very inspiring. :)

Wow. That was amazing. I honestly would've cried if I wasn't such a cold bitch. So horrible and tragic, I love it! You did a great job at portraying the nastiness of... pretty much everything. Thanks a lot for sharing this with us!

God, that is just horrible. I love it. Is this the end, or can I expect more?

Ok... I started reading this yesterday and can't stop.. Everytime I read it I start BAWLING my eyes out. PLEASE CONTINUE WRITING!

:'(

But great writing but still... :'(

Oh my!

That actually scared me then, I so didn't see it coming love it! And great chapters before too!

woah...this is a bit hardcore...hehe still keep up the good work!

Firstly on the technical side of things, beautifully written. Crisp clear phrasing, grammatically near perfect and only the odd minor spelling mistake to deal with. All in it makes for smooth easy reading and I am glad you have taken such care with your work.

As for the story itself, I found it strangely compelling. I read the first chapter almost not wanting to go on and yet something drew me. I felt for him, I felt under that sexual excitement and lust there was a void, an emptiness within him. I wondered at myself feeling some emotion for him because he was not particularly kind to his clientele that the sexual fulfilment he found was almost at their expense.

As he went from job to job with brief rests in that empty flat that was so bland, the horrible diet of incidental sandwiches and cold burritos it all added up to an existence not a life.

Bleak. That is the word. A bleak existence whether he thought so or not. Then came the arrest. At first I thought well you asked for it and I thought he would pay a fine and go. But as his uneasiness grew so did mine. That filthy hypocritical policeman with his scorn for prostitutes, so high handed yet lusting after that scorned flesh anyway. I thought you wrote brilliantly here. Every blow, punch and invasion of his body wrung another little jot of feeling from me. I was sorry for him, he wasn't lovable by any means but neither did he deserve this.

When you had him slink home and lay low I wondered which turn he would take? Shrug it off and continue or become meaner and continue? An excellent plot twist as you show him start to unravel slightly with his soft tearful client. Tears, kisses and touches, just like a "real" relationship and I was fascinated with how you portrayed his bewilderment in wanting, needing these soft things.

I like how you have him in two minds now. The horribleness of the "fridge man" raising shudders with him and also within me. The "ickiness" of it registering with him, his body not really wanting to play any more. His thoughts slowly taking precedence over his flesh. I read this with growing intensity, seeing that change blooming within him.

His encounter with the woman shows how much he has changed. You portray this excellently as your language subtly changes, everything is just that little more horribly tactile, less attractive, that slight protective ambivalence he had is gone.

I thank you for your efforts here, I feel engaged with your character, want to know what becomes of him and I want him to be happier with himself. A sentiment I would not have had at the end of chapter one or two. You have moved the story along so well. I congratulate you and I hope that you feel that you can continue.

Thankyou very much.

I like this series because it is well-written, I didn't notice any huge grammar errors, and it practically has the promise of a sex sequence in every chapter. That's pretty much all I ask.