It is a very well rounded, detached and beautiful. Subtlelty here, descriptives there. Beautiful.

NATALIE. SARAH IS A VERY UGLY NAME. THE ONLY SARAH I KNOW THAT I LIKE WOULD BE SARAH WITH THE 'FRO. EVERY OTHER SARAH IS OBSOLETE AND AWFUL.

other than that. i love this.

Gritty. I'm really loving the internal dialogue and confusion here-it's so poignant.

Great chapter.

I'm liking this story so far. Especially the characterization, the flow of the words-it's rather captivating. Mesmerizing, almost. And such beautiful allusions you have made, too; it adds a richness to the story that would not have been there otherwise.

Looking forward to reading more.

Deliciously creepy... I love it, keep up the good work

SW

Very interesting as well that you have God the one telling them to do these things. Or what he thinks is God's voice. Wonderful job!

Wow...you did an amazing job with this. I'm not sure that's a good thing hahah- just kidding. But you really got into the mind of a person who thinks thoughts like that. Well...I'm assuming you don't. Anyway, wonderful job with this chapter!

This is... it's different. I like it. I like the way your words flow and I like how your writing has matured so much over the years.

I really love this new story.

"and remember my smoky childhood, my red, dusty past."

This phrase seems to give the protagonist his own story. It gives us an idea of what his life was like before this instance, which makes him more relatable. I like it.

Such a dark little tale. I enjoyed it. Good work.