Wow, I really like what you did here. The changing of tenses actually added to the poem. It added to the 'She isnt me' factor in it. It was sad too... as most good poems usually are

wow, so intense, and sadly so true, everyone is so wrapped up in their own story, that we rarely take the time to get to know the real person anymore

just love your work

Relatable (yet again) lol

Don't worry about length. It's the quality of words to be thinking about, not the quantity :P

Beautiful. I especially liked the last paragraph.

Nicely done. I'm sure this will strike a responsive note in many people who "know all the right things to do," but still feel there is something wrong in their lives.

Hey there,

Loved the poem, it's both sweet and sensual with a mix of darkness :)...my kind of read. I plan to update a bit more on here as well in the upcoming weeks :) almost on my Christmas vacation :)

Keep up the good work, cannot wait to read the updates to your stories :)

B.

I actually really liked this (I don't know why I said actually, I'm not surprised). I liked how you switched between 'her' and 'me' it shows what two sides are thinkig really.