I understand. The reason for writing this I mean. And your author's note. So yeah...I understand. The emotion is most definitely there, as is the pretty wordplay, and the sometimes dijointed writing makes it all the better. And well...I understand.

Definitely not disappointing! Excellent wordplay and flair in this piece. I think the best line was definitely: 'You'd give anything for a little peace of mind, but no one's selling.'

You have a real talent with words, you should be proud of this piece. Chin up, and keep writing! :)