"magnetic antics"

I like how that reads. Like, a lot.

I love how science intertwines in the poem. I love the second & third stanazs.I especially love how it ends. Perfect.

I liked the first stanza by itself. It's a great description, but I honestly didn't get how it connected to the rest of the piece... how is protecting you related to attracting? And rust didn't seem related to the whole magnet/electric thing.

I really liked the second two stanzas. The way you worked in all the scientific terminology was really great. It created a great image.

I like the contrast in the last two stanzas with the drama versus scientist. It's a great contrast, but the only thing is that I felt like the science should come first just as a better way to connect it to the previous stanzas. Meaning starting with "let me be the scientist" and then saying 'cause "you're a natural at dramatics." I just think it would flow better that way.

Past Io and Ganymede,

Beyond Pluto’s arc,

Where Helios no longer pulls,

& Solar flux merges with universe,

There and only there,

Does stray neutrino—

All alone—still travel straight.

Really enjoyed the subtle rhyming here, and the strength of your narration. Keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.