|Reviews for magnetic collision|
| D. Cowman 9/13/11 . chapter 1
I like how that reads. Like, a lot.
| classic violet 6/13/11 . chapter 1
I love how science intertwines in the poem. I love the second & third stanazs.I especially love how it ends. Perfect.
| simpleplan13 1/10/11 . chapter 1
I liked the first stanza by itself. It's a great description, but I honestly didn't get how it connected to the rest of the piece... how is protecting you related to attracting? And rust didn't seem related to the whole magnet/electric thing.
I really liked the second two stanzas. The way you worked in all the scientific terminology was really great. It created a great image.
I like the contrast in the last two stanzas with the drama versus scientist. It's a great contrast, but the only thing is that I felt like the science should come first just as a better way to connect it to the previous stanzas. Meaning starting with "let me be the scientist" and then saying 'cause "you're a natural at dramatics." I just think it would flow better that way.
| Manuel Fajar 12/16/10 . chapter 1
Past Io and Ganymede,
Beyond Pluto’s arc,
Where Helios no longer pulls,
& Solar flux merges with universe,
There and only there,
Does stray neutrino—
All alone—still travel straight.
| Faithless Juliet 12/15/10 . chapter 1
Really enjoyed the subtle rhyming here, and the strength of your narration. Keep up the good work.