| Reviews for Disturbed |
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Luna Henry 12/18/10 . chapter 1 I like how you used a boggart as your insipiration and can turn it into your own story (I'm assuming this because I love Harry Potter and you said Ron's was a large spider, if I am wrong, sorry). I really love your description of George's feeling through his blinking and actions. I feel this is a great beginning to the story and only wish to read more. |
What Happens Now 12/18/10 . chapter 1I think this story was good, one thing I would change though is to reread it again. I think the grammar usage was a little off. Open-able for example you can replace with retractable, also spice George up a little give him some sort of habit that he does when he is scared something that makes him different. ALso I would add in a little piece of the event that happened, to introduce this meeting with the president, or you could have George going over the events in his head before this little conference. |
Adrian Clyde 12/18/10 . chapter 1The ending was quite intriguing. I wonder what will happen next. |