i like the poem as well as the hidden message. i did something similar once in an old account. yours turned out much better though:) thanks for sharing.

Hmm. I kind of question the use of italics in this one. I really liked "black" and "dirty" bold, but I think a lot of the italics in the second half of the poem were somewhat strained.

For some reason, loved the line, "And your kiddy feet can't walk." How marvelously condescending. Keep writing!

great! very powerful! i'm not sure if the bolding and italics are all necessary.. they make it seem a bit forced when the piece already has so much. very good job on imagery and theme.

awesome write