Aw :/

The rhyming seems a little bit... forced and awkward (e.g., "I hope this picks up the slack", but other than that, I rather like this. No complex imagery or flowery words - it's straightforward. Honest. Nice work.

- Leila

I liked the thought process here - the repetative phrasing, it made me visualize the narrators thoughts. Nice job, keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.