I will read and review all of your stories soon. College has me busy right now

Happy ending

you fail at english. haven't you ever read anything in a proper piece of literature. All endings must be crippling and painful, or at the least bittersweet.

besides that little blip though, awesome story, great grammar, interesting plot I can tell you spent hours working on it.

hello love the story!

LoL! Good work, this story made me laugh a little!

I can see imagation in this story. You are a good writer, keep it up!

I think you are a new writer with a lot of good ideas. But before you publish your next story i think you should look around the site and see how the stories are written.

when someone is talkig in your story it should look something like this, "Hey, what's your name?"

But i still believe you are a great writer, you story is interesting, you just need a little practice :)

Good Luck!

Hey lovergurl your stories have interesting plots, and good characters.

But you must make your stories belivable, okay? And find out how to seperate your chapters.

Good story, though