Great imagery! The flow is a tad jagged at times, but overall very nice. Only complaints: "Jaws; Tense." as opposed to "Jaws, tense". Also, a period on the last line ends the poem without having the reader accidentally run the sentence into the end imagery.

Cheers,
Riyin Nos Reche

Your imagery and description is impressive - the first line especially was great.

The last line wrapped the whole thing up really well too, it added a sense of enigma and even a little but of melancholy to it.

Great job!

StoryMonster

Very engaging imagery. Good Job!

beautiful descriptions