It's a good story. Maybe long sentences, but much better than I ｅｘｐｅｃｔｅｄ．

i like this... alot.. :) helpful hint... as the reader.. at the ending of this section.. i wasnt sure where exactly she was.. i knew she was at the gate... but maybe you could lead up to it a bit? ( i'm not an experienced writer or anything.. but i do love to read... and being confused about whats going on isn't the best) but other than that .. well done

Suspence..

UPDATE SOON PLEASE!

an enthralling story...

Yikes! Getting interesting and it really picked up nicely! I can't wait to know what happens next. Kudos!

You should update soon cause this ROCKS! :D

super duper good chapter! now its getting intresting!

ooo whats gonna happen next? i guess ill just have to see!

oh god this is so suspensful! i wanna know what happens next! and i really like all your description and such!

This is really good! its my fav of yours so far!

ooo intresting!

now what on earth would be in the envelope?

i LOVED your discription of kat's experience in the house...the creepiness of it all...it's just so well written! seriously! i love this!

i like how real you're making this. like, you're including the background stuff at the police force, too...it's cool! :)

hm...suspicious...