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I just wish that she won't fall (or admit) for Daniel that easily

I'm loving this. Can't wait for your next update. Daniel and Hunter are so cute together. :)

Wow!

Can't wait for the next chapter... you've kinda left us ona cliff edge there... but in a good way! :)

I like it so far...just curious as to their adult vocabulary yet childlike ways...? Very intriguing...I shall read on...

Loved it!

This is pretty amazing! i mean wow! I htink u should up the rating a bit (for language) but other than that i love it!

BTW: would u b able to review my story Benders? it'd b great 2 hear from u!

love it plz ud soon XD

Um...the reactions are a little off, especially in that last third. The conflict is good, and it VERY realistic, but Daniel's reactions are a bit more...yeah.

Also, i think since there's the new relationship and then the awkwardness between Danial and Hunter, sh'e smart, she can put two and two together and realize that Daniel doesn't want them to date because he wants HER.(Given Daniel doesn't know Tyler and therefore doesn't have a reason to dislike him.)

I mean, this text, "Yeah, I love you too. More than words can ever express."

That should be a dead giveaway.

Also, I think the mother should take Hunter aside and give her the advice in private-after Daniel's left, for example- rather than just blurting it out in front of him.

Otherwise, it's good, the chemistry's still great, dialogue is still VERY good.

greetings, i just read your story and i want to know more about 's so exciting to read these kind of stories, don't you agree? well i hope you update soon.

p.s. do you live in some part of Asia or more specific SEA. sorry for giving off an impression of a stalker.(by the way i'm not, just curious. have a a good day:)

I'm really enjoying this story. I generally don't start many stories here that are more than two or sometimes three chapters in. And even though yours was four chapters in, I can't deny that it caught my attention from the summary, which few people, including myself, seem to be able to write correctly. I'm happy to say that as I got further into the story, you didn't disappoint. Every chapter was just as interesting as the summary made me predict it would be. You're writing style is so fluid, it flows nicely (in case I spelled or used that word wrong) and the character are inganging and interesting to read about. Amazing is an understatement. I can't wait to read more. :)

Love it! i really like how daniel threatens her in the first chapter how he'll kiss her... with his tongue in her mouth kind of thing.. lol i laughed at the sarcasm there! :D update soon! :D

love itt! please updatee soon (:

I liked it!

lovee it. can't wait to find out more. (:

Lol. I liked how this chapter ended. :)