That leaves a lot of interpretation to the reader. I like that a lot (but you already know that). It also seems very personal and full of emotion.

oh wowowowow... short but awesome and amazing! iLOVE IT!

it's really awesome the way you put a whole story in a poem! D

XD

SargentLooney

This really creates a unique vision to me. Very nice :]

very poemtic and true. someone once siad, "when you cant sleep it is because reality is better than your dreams", and if this poem is a reflectin of your feelings, it sounds like you can't sleep. You are a happy insomniac. :-)