Ok, that chapter was a little different. The parents wanting the girl to have some bad influences was very 'Addams family'. I really liked "...we normally don't hug around (here)."

That was a cute chapter, looking forward to more.

Interesting. You definitely got the influence for this story from Megamind. The villian even mispronounces something, albeit her henchmen's name, rather than the city. I liked Megamind, so I will keep reading to see how you make your story different. So far I like the byplay between the villian and henchman.

Aw it's all over :'( I love the ending, actually I love the whole story

it's great and really imaginative D but maybe I reviewed a bit too much... Lol well done with te story and good luck with future writing/reading D

Leanne x

D yay happy days! slightly cheesy, but hey everyone loves a bit of cheese .

Is that the end? because if so, i think you need a kind of exit with Bradley and Annie ya kno ]

Leanne x

Aw that's a nice ending to the chapter

oh FIGHT FIGHT FIGHT! hahaha. loving it. Don't stop yet, i need to see how you're going to end this! D

Leanne x

Jetman's in love with Madame Vicious? oh boy!

oh wow i wasn't expecting that o lol, you've made it lead back to what it was before D well done, I lloved reading it. Only thing i'll say is theres alot of typos. you might wanna re-read it. happy future writing! D

Leanne x

oh deep p

This has gotten so much better D its great with detail. and i really got in to it

Well done D

Leanne x

oh wow, I liked these two chapters, well writen, well thought out, and your descriptions are definitely improving D

I would still say a bit more description, and re-read ur writing, last line, it says, "leaving annie alone feeling nothing but empyness." now i know my mental vocabulary isn't great, but i have a feeling that was meant to be Emptyness? lol, anyway, Carry on! i need to see how it ends! D

Leanne x

I like the plan, it's come across well. You need to reread alot of these chapters though. there are lots of typos, grammer errors, etc. nd btw, in this tense it's 'Lair' sorry i didnt menion it before

but anyway, love the storyline, love how you've set it out, and still want to read more ]

oh thats a good cliff hanger ]

It was good, but i felt like i didn't really learn anything new from this chapter, since we already found out before that Jetman fancies, madame vicious. But if you made something else happen in this chapter, like if Stella did something really evil, like throw a cat into a tree or something then it would be comical, and more interesting ]

I really enjoyed reading this. It has a great story line, and is different to all the superhero stories i have read. The only things i should say is that you haven't gone into enough detail when describing the scene and what they do.

When someone reads a story, they need to almost picture it in their minds, and then describe it in as much detail as possible. Thats the way i do it, and it seems to work ]

also, you need to remember that you have put this story under humor, you need to add more lines in this to make the reader laugh. either that or change the category to fantasy or supernatural.

Anyway, i'd love to read more, and hope that you take my advice into mind. try reading other stories, that have lots of detail, it will help.

feel free to come and critisize my work too ] idm, i'd just like to get some feedback from some people ]

well, enjoy future writing and future readin D

Hello, there. First off, one of the number one rules of writing is that descriptions are good things. I really not one to talk about using descriptions, but that would be something you can work on adding to flesh out your story. Otherwise, it's fairly well-written. You have excellent grammar and spelling skills (I still find myself surprised that people exist on the internet that can spell). Your characters could also use a little fleshing out, but I think the descriptions will help with that. Try including gestures and what the characters are thinking. Otherwise, a solid attempt at a hero/villain story. Keep writing. :)