I loved the description of popcorn. It was great how you did that without even calling it popcorn and it was a really good image in my head too.

I also like how you integrated the body parts towards the beginning and the end. It kind of connected the piece in an odd sort of way.

I also liked the selfish selflessness. It was a great oxymoron that made sense.

PS Check out the Review Game and/or it's Review Marathon (link in my profile).

this block style is interesting from you. really liked moribund.