|Reviews for My Death|
| Ioga 4/19/12 . chapter 5
I've been catching up with some old updates I've collected earlier. :)
I think the change to Death's point of view was a good move, it gives the story more depth to have some idea how this world works beyond the limited knowledge of the primary narrator. I actually considered doing something similar in the second chapter of Putting on my Otter Shirt, but then I got distracted by something else I wanted to get written out and never got around to actually doing it. (I've got this constant pressure to write a companion to the story that explains this stuff from an external narrator point of view. Maybe I'll go for a crazy series of stuff and delayed gratification and hope for the best. We'll see, I'll have to actually finish the thing first.)
The plot twist from rebuilding the narrator into a subservient creature was interesting as well. I noticed that reporting the sex as a passing fact was such an unusual choice it caught my attention. It's fascinating how with eating or even dying you can easily get away with a one-word remark, but this felt strange. What does that tell us about our culture/species... X-)
Thanks for this! Do keep writing!
| 5465165 11/5/11 . chapter 5
whoa. Blew my mind. A different view completely and still connected to your amazing story. Keep it up and i most definitely look forward to the next chapter.
| Ioga 11/1/11 . chapter 4
Hm. I was catching up with the last 3 chapters of the story thinking, hey, I really like where you're going with this concept, these bloodsuckers have some spirit of their own, I better leave a review.
And then the last chapter threatens to quit the story if reviews are not given, and I feel bad to give a review after that. (Since it looks like I gave it because of the threatening and not because I wanted to.) :/
Oh well, I promise not to review the next time? ;)
Thanks for this!
| 5465165 10/27/11 . chapter 2
I love this!
"You are mine and only mine." A sharp pain stabbed me in the temple and then it was gone.I flung myself out from under him, and threw my untethered self to the far end of the cell.
That's my favorite part! It was so abrupt and perfect! Keep it up!
| 5465165 10/27/11 . chapter 1
Whoa. this is really cool! I love the new perspective on a such a feared thing.
| PJ Draft 4/24/11 . chapter 4
Sucha cliffhanger! :D While I love those I do hope people review so they can read more. Some people are so stubborn... Anyways, thanks for the head turner! I hope people decide to review (even if it may not be constructive crit. Even though I may not have any suggestions / comments on mind I at least am willing to say whether I liked it or not. In this case I did.) Anyways, I completely understand if you decide to axe the story. As a writer on this site as well I understand perfectly the craving for reviews in order to press on. Although I would hate to see this story go, I understand if you do decide to axe it and move on to greener pastures where the cows graze and actually provide milk... That analogy is bad. Well, I am glad to see this updated. This is a very unique story, and sadly many overlook a jem like this in favor of fluffy high school romance stories. I hope those who are reading decide to drop you a line because you deserve it! -end rant- Thanks for the update! Till next time hopefully? Lovely job. -PJ
| PJ Draft 4/14/11 . chapter 3
Oh my gawd, everytime I read this I see one of my best friend in this character. Like no joke, if she had supernatural powers she'd be your MC. Anyways, storywise I do adore this. I love when I see an a story willing to get their hands bloody. Also, thanks for the speical shout out. Makes me feel mighty speical. Anyways, as I have said before: The writing is clear, paints a picture, and handles feelings (or lack there of) quite nicely. This was short but I tend to enjoy shorter chapters with more frequent updates. I can't wait till next chapter! Looking forward to reading more soon. -PJ
| The-One-Who-Needs-A-Life 2/15/11 . chapter 2
Omg I love this story! I haven't seen anythng like it. It's so unique! I especially love it how you make out that death is a master of a cult or something D
but only thing, you sometimes use the wrong words like you put through for threw at some point, and there was another one in there, can't remember what though...
Anyway, great story, please write more!
| PJ Draft 2/3/11 . chapter 2
Wow, sorry for the late review I just realized you updated. Story is developing well. Hope the third chapter will be out soon. Anyways, Looking forward to it.
| Ioga 1/30/11 . chapter 1
Hi again, grabbed a quick sample of your recent work. :) I liked this story, and actually not because I'm that hot for vampires as such (these days they're crawling all over the place thanks to Twilight) but because it had a touch of crazy in the mix. The way of telling is also quite "childish", in the sense that the narrator seems innocent and proud of what she's/it's doing without really understanding what's going on. I've written a piece with a slightly similar style, but it's in an orphanage and doesn't have a whole lot to do with the morbid stuff (Venom; it's the "romance" I mentioned earlier btw; puppy love thing).
Minor nitpicks: I've spotted a recurring tendency to double r's in the middle of some words: scarred (scared, i.e. frightened - scarred means with scars), starred (stared, i.e. looked at - starred means with stars), and suchlike. It's so consistent you might be able to catch these with a quick search for 'rr's in general. :)
Thanks for this!
| roxyideman 1/12/11 . chapter 1
You made me shudder! I loved it. I have never read anything like this. It's unique and it makes the reader actually feel like Death is near. Update!
| The Folk Extraction 1/11/11 . chapter 1
I like it. The writing style is different and interesting, vague, but eloquently written.
My favorite line: 'I now smiled and waved at the people on the street that only I could see.'
-shudder- It's so creepy. The slow decline into madness is great.
| PJ Draft 1/9/11 . chapter 1
A little to dark for my taste but interesting. (Need to stop reading scary stories so late at night. Freaks me out.) Besides that, I like how you can feel the story. Sounds odd but I can almost feel the presence of death and the fear that it causes. Your story is free from grammatical errors, although, I did notice a little typo 10 paragraphs or so from the bottom. Doesn't hinder the story though, just thought I should point it out. Hope to see some more of your recent work soon. Sometimes a little fear two-thirty in the morning is a good thing. Do post more..