Haha aw poor Ida at the end; when will he twig that Amrae is much better at fighting than he is? Pride could be his downfall, at some point. I really liked the dream sequence, great imagery used there. Also great work on building up the atmosphere, yet again. Overall, once more I really, really enjoyed the chapter and will be reading more asap!

Wow, that sounds like one hefty price to pay... I wonder who it will be?

Wow... the more i read this the more i get engrossed, i love ur story. Please write more soon!

Things are really interesting and tense in this story, and so we learn. Amrae tried to bring someone back to life? Well that is a surprise. Hm...

Awesome chapter!

As soon as she said, "I've heard all your stories before," my jaw dropped. What has she been hiding? I like how you dropped that in. The way you built up tension, and the atmosphere, in this chapter was really good; it worked so well and I could feel myself getting tenser, wondering what was going to happen next. Great chapter!

As always, I really enjoyed that chapter. Ahhh Dean, maybe he should escape. The Summoner is quite a scary character, and I keep wondering what his plans for Dean are.

Poor Russel. Sea sickness cannot be nice to deal with, along with randomly ending up on a boat as he did. Overall, it was a good chapter as always, characters are solid and you have a good balence between dialogue and description. Great stuff.

so was this move extremely retarded or one that will work out later on for Dean? Either way I actually do like his cockiness and arrogance, it gives him character :)

Great chapter, I like how you split it in two parts. The first half certaintly was interesting - I like the Empress as a character, but I bet she'd get very annoying, very quickly, for anyone who actually had to deal with her. I can't help but wonder, because of the Guardian's warnings, if Ida is perhaps bringing something to this land that he doesn't intend? The idea i'm getting, so far, is that he's going to be the cause of desctruction, without really realising it.

As for the second half, as always I really like your interactions between the characters and you did well here at revealing more about them without anything being too explicit or feeling like you shoved it in there. Great job.

I get the feeling that Ida was looking forward to getting to slay that two headed beast. But Amrae beat him to the punch, she outsmarted them. Two heads are not better than one indeed. Awesome chapter!

Awwwwww, Ida's so cute at the end!

Write more soon please, I can;t wait to see what happens next

Oh Dean, what have you got yourself into? Anyway, another good chapter. I like how you use what we know of Dean's personality at the end; it really comes as no surprise to the reader when he agrees and I like how, as a reader, you can see how the Summoner is using Dean and taking advantage of his lack of knowledge, but to what ends, I wonder. The interaction between the characters is written really well, as always, especially with Amrae, Russsell , Danten and Ida. Overall, yeah, great job.

Ramshee reminds me of Reinfield (I think that's the name...) in Dracula :P Intentional or not, I personally think it works really well. Anyway, really great chapter - I loved the scene with Ida and the crawler, and the small hints of emotion work well, especially with Amrae trying to cover up her smile. Ahh Dean, I have the feeling you're in over your head. Anyway, didn't notice any mistakes or anything so yeah, great chapter!

Hm... I reckon that this could go at the end of the previous chapter as opposed to being a new one.

Fossier, Fossier, Fossier... you lying bastard. But I can understand why he's telling them both that especially with Ida and Dean's competitive personalities.

Can't wait to see where their quest takes them. Hope someone gets shoved into a ditch. xD

Jax C.

Another well written chapter.

Small grammatical error at the beginning: "it's unpredictable turns" should be "its".

You have a talent for working comedy into the story without making it feel forced.

"... Like Dean. Dead Dean, or rather, not so dead Dean." - I thought that line was great.

And I also like how you showed us that Ida has a bit of an issue with heights because it means that he's not going to turn into a Mary-Sue character. I hope this gets worked into a later chapter - I wonder why Dean never took advantage of it?

However I feel like some of Ida's dialogue is unnecessary. Fossier's spiel would flow much better if Ida wasn't interrupting every few sentences; but I'm conflicted about this point since it shows that Ida is a bit of an impatient character and that Fossier has been a bit lax in the discipline area in addition to the easy way Fossier and Ida interact with each other... the positives outweigh my criticism. /

Anyway, I like the idea of Master Fossier being cursed - I look forward to getting to know the details of his damnation further on. Awkward for Ida if he also gets damned by the Green Guardian. xD

Dean better be accompanying him on this quest. Those two are most amusing when they're together. )

Jax C.

This was a great chapter, a nice introduction to the main plot. Your characterization is great, I love Dean and Ida's personalities - but again; try to show instead of tell. Personality can be revealed through action and dialogue as opposed to simply stating what character's are like.

Loved the part where Dean was slowly mutilating the beet and the ending was great. Brownie points for making me laugh! xD

Jax C.