| Reviews for The Dusk Before Dreams |
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Mariabelle 4/6/12 . chapter 40Aahhh! It's done! D: I liked the story but I found the ending pretty good but I found an error! Dun, dun dun! You said that it was dark/bright but in earlier chapters didn't you say that the sun doesn't move and it's forever in a twilight state which is why it's called twilight city? |
Mariabelle 3/22/12 . chapter 39Yeay! A happy ending for the fight but the last moment seemed a bit fast, also you keep on typing the wrong character's name. For example you said Cole and the good guys but you should've said Cain. As for the ending you could have made the final blow seem more effortful by adding the Council to the mix. |
Mariabelle 3/18/12 . chapter 37Hi, so I just read all the chapters so far and I noticed that you have a good story line but you also have some frequent but small errors which I think is more likely due to carelessness rather than not knowing how to write it so I suggest rereading the chapter before updating :) oh! And also in some chapters you're inconsistent with the areas, for example in one chapter you said _side was mostly run by the incubo but then in the next chapter you said that that area is neutral. But other than that good job so far :) update soon! :D |
Weird 9/23/11 . chapter 23 So I* think i was weird but originally i thought i was weird18 Anyway keep on updating! |
Anonymous 7/1/11 . chapter 24 That was pretty cool. Now I can't wait to see what happens in the end. Oh, and one last thing. ; Semi-colons. Use them. |
Anonymous 6/10/11 . chapter 23 Finally! I hope this is the last part of Reliving the past, 'cause I'm excited to see if they'll save James or not. |
Anonymous 5/22/11 . chapter 22 Oh my snap, JAMES IS GETTING CORRUPTED! YOU HAVE TO UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE! |
Weird 5/12/11 . chapter 22 N O! What's going to happen to James? I highly suggest u update now! |
JumperxMelon 4/30/11 . chapter 22Yay! It's been a while since the update :) NO! Not James! He better get out hope to read more soon :L |
JumperxMelon 3/22/11 . chapter 21I REALY don't like this Cole guy, he's a bit too smug for my taste... I hope James kicks his ass later! . |
Weird 3/21/11 . chapter 21 Why are u corrupting James mind! |
JumperxMelon 3/2/11 . chapter 20NOO! JAMES! I really hope someone hears James and helps or I will be majorly upset! Please update soon xD |
Weird 3/1/11 . chapter 20 OH MY GOD! If YOU corrupt him I will not continue reading your story and advertizing your story at my blog. |
JumperxMelon 2/14/11 . chapter 19:O whats going to happen! btw, i really hope Sarah and Michael are good guys coz I'm beginning to really like them :) |
Weird 2/14/11 . chapter 19 OH! its getting scary now! well not really but the story is getting really interesting! |