You are gonna continue this right? Please do, that was awesome!

You are gonna continue this right? Please do, that was awesome

It's a pretty good start.

Love it! Update soon:)

The fact that this had no reviews made me read this, to see if it was anything worthwhile. After reading it, it seems I have a lot to say.

Your stories seem to deal with highschool fiction cliches common to this site, and this story in no way lacking extreme cliche in many areas, from the sandy haired jock to the 'raven haired beauty', a phrase which is used far to often on this site, in my opinion.

A few others are that the school virtually worships Adrian (a name used in almost very slash fiction on here, in reference to a beautiful black haired boy), and Adrian's bad home life.

None of the characters are well defined at all (the only one I'm even remotely interested in is Alex),and some places just feel like you added the information in to add words. As well as this, try not to switch between past and present tense.

Overall, this isn't a bad story. I just feel like I've read it a billion times already. However, that's just me. Good job with the general flow of the story and the descriptions.

Keep writing. (: