I like how ur descriptions are detailed, and how you have the imagination to come up with this ] well done I liked it, but is it mean how I laughed when I found out she died by mascara?

Lol, I don't wear make up since I truly can't be bothered, but I don't like people caking themselves with makeup so when I read this I had an evil laugh to myself ] lol

I'm not evil

... I hope \

Leanne x

This is good :) Your descriptions are great. I would say that the words doesn't always quite fit, and the rhyme seems a bit forced at times, but the story behind the poem is very interesting and original :)