|Reviews for Darkness|
| True Promise 6/25/11 . chapter 9
Overall the story is well constructed. A lot of the punctuation doesn't show up unless it's a question mark in the dialogue. Also, the flashback of the torture scene didn't really seem to have any lead in, making it a little jumpy.
However, I have to congratulate you on the names. Lilliana is a nice one and I think Carter is an interesting name on a girl. Even the names that are slighlty more 'generic' like Anna and James seem to stand out because they're longer.
| Candy-necklace31 4/14/11 . chapter 8
o cliffy GR I was getting so into it then BANG! out of nowhere comes a cliffy and not another chapter:'( pleasse update soon Ima gunna Die if you dont
| Skylinger 3/31/11 . chapter 8
Its a bit confusing from chapter 5 to 6. you might want to explain what happened here. Overall it seems like a good tale but honestly im still confused by why she isnt with demitri.
| Skylinger 3/31/11 . chapter 2
Much better. It's an interesting begining you have. I would however suggest you get a Beta. You miss a lot of punctuation and they can help you with polishing. Your ideas are great and you do a good job bringing the characters to life. A few changes and it would be even better.
| Skylinger 3/31/11 . chapter 1
Hey Black Moon. Soory I didn't get a chance to read and review yesterday. My day suddenly went crazy. I didn't even get my chapters finished and uploaded. But better late than never right? As for your first chapter...it's not a chapter at all. It's a sentance. This would work for like a summary but you need more here to make it a chapter. It can be short but at least a few paragraphs. It does however draw a reader in.
| caspeana 2/6/11 . chapter 6
it made sense, just wondering how she will return to the castle keep it up it is a solid story line
| caspeana 2/3/11 . chapter 1
great story so far i hope u keep going as it is just getting good with the kidnapping
| x.x buk wurm x.x 1/24/11 . chapter 5
Oh no! cant wait for ur next update, great chapter