Nicely done good job, You've improved and rather nicely i must say. The flow is steady the rhymes are great. And you said you had difficulty rhyming... \:-) Nicely done I like the ending it fits well.

-B.H.

Simply the best poem I've read from you. The rhyming flows steadily, and the theme is pretty deep. However, the final line felt kind of weak. I feel that you could've done a more powerful ending, but it's amazing nonetheless.