Very compelling its chaos help it run smoothly and conveys the message. I enjoyed it thank you for posting. Great job

Wow, intense! You start reading and all of a sudden you're reading faster and faster just to get to the end.

I loved the repetition of [What do you want}, it's very effective and the words themselves just gain in intensity each time.

The emotions are strongly felt - like I was breaking down with you.

BlameMyMuses

wow. this was really good.. i found myself scrolling down the page faster and faster as it got more and more intense.

scary, worth reading

i like the flow and pacing which seemed to get faster and more urgent as the poem went on, ending in 3x what do you want. i like how is like someone having a panic attack, unable to breath and finally blacking out. good poem.

Sweet! More awesome poetry! Keep it up!