My historical knowledge of this period's pretty terrible so I won't know what is real and what is your invention. But I can tell that this is very well researched. I like how you open the first chapter by setting the scene in time and then fill out other details about the political situation of the time through conversations. Expressions like "sons of Votan" also add to the historical feel by incorporating the religion and culture into all aspects of the characters' behaviour rather than only dealing with them in specific paragraphs for that purpose. Overall it's very well written and I am intrigued.

I enjoyed how you started this off with a paragraph relating to this time. Not only did it put this story into perspective, it was a unique way to grasp the reader’s attention for the coming piece.

The last line, to me at least, felt a little off. The tone and conveyance felt corny and a little juvenile, and when compared to the rest of the piece, which reads brilliantly, it fell a little flat.

Nice start so far! The idea is original and different, which I like about it. And yay, some of it is german! I love germany :) Your descriptions were good, and Im really interested to see where this story will go! I never really listened to history back in class, so I havent much clue about the romans and Caesar, but you seem to be incorporating them well into your story.

RH