I love this. It's so emotional and true and dark.

Favorite line - 'Lose myself in your eyes/but find me in hell/I'll be with you sometime soon/because you did this as well'

OMG, AMAZING! And totally could be an Evanescence song. I swear, C, once you figure out how to write tunes or get someone to write them for you, you're gonna be Amy Lee. GREAT GREAT JOB.

Fav line:stay with me, be my ghost/I'll come with you/I'll stay near you/but I'll miss life the most

and the backgroundy bit (I can't stop loving you but I can always stop living)

Once again, LOVE IT.

Really great language and imagery - very dark :) A bit more punctuation might make it a bit more readable, though. Loved the final lines: "I can't stop loving you/ So we'll stop living".