|Reviews for Glass Castle|
| this wild abyss 2/4/11 . chapter 1
I liked the overall image and extended simile of this piece. It was unique and interesting, and you expanded upon the idea clearly and dynamically.
However, your word choice could have used some variation. Words like 'shatter' appear more than once, and in such a short piece, it made things feel monotonous and redundant.
But I liked this as a whole.
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